A new modern hymn on ordo salutis. Feedback welcomed

Dear fellow brethren hymnary.org, 

Technically I am a new hymnary user. I recently finished writing a modern hymn that tries to describe the faith journey of a christian. 

It somewhat describes the doctrines covered in the TULIP acronym without ever mentioning it. At least I tried to make it that way. If you ever give it a hear, would appreciate any feedback you would give. Perhaps it would be a blessing to you as well as it was for me and the local church where I am. 
 To those interested, you could find it here:
Knowing we are His | My.Hymnary
"Knowing we are His". A mini "ordo salutis" in a singable modern hymn form. (YouTube video)
Admitedly, it was recorded just with a phone.

Best regards,


Aimi